Doesn't have one, any suggestions?

by Lady Chimera

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< 'I'm a witch' by Lady Chimera

Doesn't have one, any suggestions?

Lonely long and timid nights
Sweet tears as parents fight
Cry for love and cry for hate
Lonely crying is not thy fate%u2026
How long till freedom rises?
How long till pain demises?
You give me a key and say I live in my own darkness,
To free myself, I cannot ignore the harshness,
You don%u2019t know everything,
That is of my own making%u2026
They say to be responsible,
They say anything%u2019s possible,
You say follow what brings joy,
You say it tis nothing but a ploy,
I say you cannot depend on anyone,
I say I cannot be the child anymore.
To live a long and lonely life,
That shall not be my strife.
Leave me alone to make my own choices,
Leave me alone to ignore your voices.
I want to choose my own responsibility.
Not have you throw me every impossibility.
Leave me be?
Can you not see?
I am but a girl,
Stuck in this monstrous world.
If I could scream the world away,
You of all people would not stay.
You say you want the things I do.
I say if only you really knew.
The things I%u2019d love to have,
Are not along your little %u201Cpath.%u201D
To love is merely not enough.
I have always been much too soft.
I know I%u2019ve never been alone.
I think if only I had shown%u2026
The things you know,
Are but raindrops on the hallow snow.
Can you not love me?
You say you do, but then ignore me.
Am I blind, or are you hollow?
Am I stupid to follow?
You can bring me nothing this way.
Yet I love you anyway.
We cannot be stuck in the past,
If we want love to last%u2026
> 'Us leaving the fair' by Lady Chimera

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Oct 16th 2006
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I wrote it today.. it just kinda happened after a conversation with my ex boyfriend. Please comment...it's also being posted because the other peom's coming along really slow as well as my other work right now...

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Egan Says:

Sweet tears as parents fight doesn't make sense.

Maybe use a more intelligent vocabulary?

Nanashi667 Says:

It's very well done. I think the vocabulary is great.

CardboardtubeNinja Says:

Why bother crituqueing something I'm bollocks at?

Ozzyturtle123 Says:

Weird title, but heartbreaking poem!:'-)