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Where the White Man Stares
"I live in a land
Where nobody cares;
Where they fight and they kill
Where the white man stares."
They arrived in a flash
With their guns and their blades;
They said they'd go through us
if we got in their way.
We then decided
That we wouldn't back down:
They can't have our country!
They can't have our crown!
The next thing I knew
I was back at their camp:
To be hostage?
To be killed?
To be questioned under-lamp?
No.
A room.
I was placed in a room
To be tortured at will;
It was a message, a warning,
To prove they could kill.
They had ears in the corners
And eyes on the walls;
They had mouthes by the eyes
and guns in the halls.
It was hard, but I lived;
I'd eat and I'd drink.
I sat at wondered:
"Do they care what I think?"
No.
They didn't.
Many weeks passed
And I had yet to be freed.
I felt washed away,
That I was no longer a need.
Then, to my horror
They opened the door.
They shoved me and pushed me
Until I could feel no more.
I lay there, In the sand,
Dying of thirst
Until along came a man
In a shining white shirt.
He saved my life;
He allowed me to live.
He took me to a place
Where they'd feed and they'd give.
He asked me my story;
And I couldn't refuse
He'd saved me from hell
I had nothing to lose.
"I live in a land
Where nobody cares;
Where they fight and they kill
Where the white man stares..."
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Comments
arbitrarylogic Says:
Yes! Something with a definite originality, and not only that, but a relation to some very pressing political issues in the real world today. Well-constucted; I like how the end ties in with the beginning through the repetition of the first stanza.
Very nice.
Sandcastle Says:
There's just nothing like a human feelings-filled piece that tells of struggles elsewhere...
Well, I thought it was a very thoughful inspiration.
NyuAngelKitty Says:
wow this is amazing! very intense and the rythem really flows. great job!
SecretofMana Says:
Nice! It flows so well and I love you you percieved the poverty!
I loved the stanza with "The Ears in the Corners and Eyes by the Ears" It was awseom!
Great job!
shyboy Says:
the preview picture scares me
seen the dp before at LL, the gook showed it :3
SuicideQueen Says:
ive had that pic on my wall since the day that issue got to my house. good poem
Bunnii Says:
really good poem. We were just talking about this picture in my photography class, I couldn't believe it when I saw it on the front page.
Acronychal Says:
Oo very nice. I think a general tightening up of language and meter would improve this hundredfold. It might make me pass out from "excellent poem exhaustion"