The Crow: Phantom Gate Part 2

by Kail

in Completed Works

The Crow: Phantom Gate Part 2

Ricky is sitting at the back of the bus. It's the middle of the night and he's heading for his killer, Mark. The crow is flying next to the bus and looks in the window at Ricky and squawks. Ricky looks over to a couple a few seats infront of him. He watches them and listens in on their conversation.
"Mark, I don't want your girlfriend to find out about me, I mean she's gone through so much what with her ex-boyfriend being murdered a year ago, I don't want her to know that you've been having an affair for the past 7 months." The girl says to him.
"Don't worry, she's completely oblivious. She's so blinded with love for me, she'd forgive me for anything I did to her. I could beat her senseless, which I do, and she's still love me." He replies.
"Oh, Mark, that makes me feel so much better!" She says to him before they start making out.
This only makes Ricky angrier, he starts to be fueled with such rage that he gets up to confront him prematurely to his original plan.
He walks up to the two and interrupts them.
"Excuse me, but I couldn't help but hear that you were having an affair with this woman while you're current girlfriend is crazy about you. I'd like you to know that I don't like that very much." He tells them.
"What are you supposed to be? Some clown? Get out of here!" He says to him.
A big, hulking black man gets up from the seat infront of Mark's and looks at Ricky.
"You heard the man. Now back off." The man says to Ricky in a business like fashion.
Mark looks over to the black man.
"Manute, take care of this guy for me, will ya?" He requests of the man.
"With pleasure, sir." He crunches his knuckles.
He pulls out a gun and shoots Ricky right in the chest. The bus comes to a screeching hault and everyone except the four get off in a frenzy.
Ricky looks and acts as if he's damaged, but then he notices something.
"Would ya look at that! The wound... heals itself! Ha ha!" He laughs.
Manute has a startled look on his face as he gazes at the bullet hole that seems to only have ripped his shirt.
"Damn, my skin heals but my shirt doesn't? Oh well." Ricky jokes.
Mark gets a little disgruntled.
"Shit... who the fuck is this guy?" He says as he gets up and runs to the steering wheel. "Manute! Get ready to throw him out when I start driving!"
"Yes sir." He replies.
Manute picks up Ricky and breaks open a window.
"You might be able to heal yourself, but you can't harm us if I can keep you away from us." He says to Ricky as he tosses him out the window.
Ricky lands in the street and watches as the bus drives off. He stands up and brushes the dust off his trench coat.
"Now I got a better idea of what I'm up against, and I got more rage to fuel my fight." Ricky starts walking down the road, the crow lands on his shoulder as he walks.
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Mature Aug 24th 2006
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Part 2 of my ongoing fan-fiction based on the comics of James O'Barr and the movies/tv series also based on those comics. So far I'm liking it, so I don't care if you guys like it or not. This really is just a test for me to see how I can write stories, it's like tracing to get better at drawing. You go over the lines and see every detail of the drawing, then you go and draw it just by looking at it, then eventually you can reproduce the drawing from memory, and after that you can take what you learned from copying that one drawing and adapt it to your own drawings to make them better. Thats what I'm using this short story for, to help me improve my own writing. Ofcourse this whole story is mine, I came up with it, but I'm basing it off of something someone else did. Um... yeah.

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Jawless Says:

Very good, shows promise. Can't wait for more.