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Far Away
the love of my life is just beyond my grasp...
hes floating further away and i can't reach him...
his heart is still the same but i just cant find it...
he's the love of my life but i just cant find him...
the man i've liked for so long just won't come closer...
he's so close but he won't let me touch him...
each time i break the ice...
one or the other wills that wall of glass to appear once again...
I'm in the dark...
I'm lost...
I can't find the way out...
or in...
the air is so thick in here...
someone help me out of the box...
He's just so far away...
and I'm afraid of what's behind that door...
Can he possibly still be there...
waiting...
wanting ME...
loving only ME...
is he willing to wait so long...
until i can break the shell SHE controls...
Will he let me come in...
can he open his heart when its still being repaired...
how can we love another when we've been hurt so much...
i'm willing to try...
why isn't he...
I'm in the dark...
I'm lost...
I can't find the way out...
or in...
the air is so thick in here...
someone help me out of the box
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Comments
Celiseyah Says:
this is actually about two guys...not just one...if you couldn't tell...
Lain Iwakuraa Says:
its a nice poem. but i think it would be alot better without these lines :
"I'm in the dark...
I'm lost...
I can't find the way out...
or in...
the air is so thick in here...
someone help me out of the box..."
It just dosn't fit with the rest of the poem. but what do i know, im not an expert
Celiseyah Says:
hm...we'll see...i'll ask a few of my friends...does kinda seem out of place...but it's not really supposed to fit...see the stanza order (what each one is about) goes: kevin - david - me - kevin - david - me...the ones you want to take out is about me, so i don't know...
Shadee Says:
very cool writing.
very interesting that it's about 2 guys :)
Celiseyah Says:
yeah...thx...i popped this one out after writing in my journal and liking part of the paragraph...so i used it and this is what i got in about...oh...ten minutes...
SailorMoon Says:
You know what? I felt before just the way your poem describes. At least, just the way I interprete it. Back when I just had fell in love with Edward who is my boyfriend now, and that I was certain I'd never get him... Lessay my feelings were really complicated back then, I even pushed him toward another woman, thinking he'd be happy. Haha there's nothing more confusing to a guy. So yeah, it was hard on me for a year. But I finally seduced him. ^..^ He loves me just as much as I love him. But it was a lot of "work", to tell him and make him understand all my feelings.
Before I opened to him, I felt like I was in a box too. Maybe the solution is just to open yourself to other ppl? Or simply directly speak to those boys? It'll be tough, and lots of emotionnal stress, but I think in the end it'll work out for the best. Whether you end up with one of those boys like I did or not. Being honest, and knowing the truth (whether one of them loves you or not) is really important to relieve stress.
That's what I felt from your poem. ^^