-:-.Wash me Away.-:-

by ToPzY TuRvY TwIsT

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-:-.Wash me Away.-:-

Icy breath, Cold touch,
Wash away my pain,
Leave me with no shame.

Pouring down, Falling fast,
Wash away my isolation,
Soak me in sweet temptation.

Loud as thunder, Bright as lightning,
Wash away my doubt,
Make me scream and shout.

Gently dripping, quietly soaking,
Wash away my fear,
Hold me close my dear.

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Jun 8th 2006
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Ok, so it was raining yesterday, and I was sitting in religon class, and this is the result.

I think the person I wrote this for know's who they are.

♥- Tessa

Comments

TheAngelofHavoc Says:

I REALLY love this! It's so expressive.

Me like! ^^

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CarelessWhisper Says:

:3 You're getting better.

I like this, Tori's right, it is expressive.

Only crit I can give is count the syllables per line. Make it the same, so it has rhythm AND rhyme, not just rhyme. ♥ (And if you don't use the puppy icon in your reply I'm going to poke you to death. &hearts

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TIFA Lockhart FFVII Says:

That's so deep =)

Fitos Says:

I don't know what is the thing that makes me like this so much... but it just sounds good to me.

Only the two last stanzas sound a bit off, but I don't know why...