Would That Make You Happy?

by TrappedInWonderland

in Completed Works

Would That Make You Happy?

We're in the same boat
just like we {}always{} have been.
.d.r.i.n.k.i.n.g. in more life
than we could ever
I
..m
....a
......g
........i
.........n
...........e

existed.

But you're -still- my hero
[whether or not you think my words are .t.r.u.e.]
I'd die and go to \h\e\l\l
for
you.

I would inhale life
and shoot.out.the.moon.
just to keep your face lit up
and to keep you w(a(r(m.
&&
I would <>k<>i<>l<>l to see that smile on your
{face} again.

*would that make you happy?*

Love is just a word;;
s.u.g.a.r.c.o.a.t.e.d
with
C
O
T
T
O
N
C
A
N
D
Y
kisses.
((That causes everyone to become -vulnerable-))
But this vunlerability...
is just another
inevitable thing
-when I'm around you-.

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May 16th 2006
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general human nature love romance
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one of my friends dared me to write a love poem. this is all i could come up with. i realize that it sucks...but i'm not very good at writing love poems. enjoy.

i got the picture from someone's myspace.

Comments

TheressaZ Says:

I think that it's cute.
I love the spacing of the words.
I'll admit,
it's different from what you usually write,
But that doesn't make it anyless good.
Btw, I love the cute picture!

mirage712 Says:

its great, only suggestion is that you maybe get rid of some of the ( and ... etc. it tends to stop it from flowing, and thats what i love about your poems, they flow