I was inspired by my feelings, and other peoples poems about their dark secrets, all of what you read is true, some of it ryhmes, and some of it doesn't, but i don't care about that.
P.S The last verse of the poem was taken into affect a while ago, it was my new years resolution...and so far it is working, for the scar's of my sins help to show me why i should live.
Comments
ScootyPuff Says:
god damnit.
Carmen and Jimmie Says:
Wow............this is so touching...everything..
Paralysis Says:
meaningful...but..wrong,improper, blind and foolish
azn32boi Says:
I got this quote from a book, "I knew it was goin to happen, but I also knew I couldn't stop it"
But this is a nice poem, sensitive.
As to this poem, even you know it's goin to happen and want to stop it, it really isn't that much up to it. It's more up to the future. It's writen, you can't stop it unless it says you will.
Nanook Says:
...Hmm. Funny how this poem is THE SAME as the other featured "poem of the day."
Oh, well. Nothing pleases the crowd like self-abuse, eh?
sushilicious Says:
Ahh, I used to do that same. You poured a lot of emotion in the poem, and I also like the picture that goes along with it.
If you're feeling stressed or hopeless or anything like that, don't worry. It'll pass. I don't want to offend anybody, I've no religion, but Buddhist philosophy says "everything is impermanent". Unhappiness and happiness will not last forever.
LordOv Says:
Very awesome poem
Hebi Says:
i wouldve never guessed, but then again the internet is very concieling, u cant see faces or emotion, only words that can be mistook or completely understood, but i wish the best for u and hope u can overcome whatever may make u wish to cause urself pain, and while its true that one pain can distract from another, it doesnt make the other go away, and that can be hard to deal with at times, but (and forgive me if ur not religous) the bible says that god will never allow u too be given more than u can handle, so remember even though life is stressful and hard to deal with, u do have the ability to get through it, and dont feel that ur alone either cause there r many people who understand and relate to u, i myself have had many troubles, but they never compare with the joys u can find in life, weather it be love, friendship, or even just a sunny day, trust me when i say the the good will allways outweigh the bad, just like i wrote in one of my poems: In the darkness we stand alone, but in that same darkness there is light. A light that shines in our hearts, that illuminates our path.
Love, friendship, kindness, and hope. These are the things that create that light.
Pain, anger, and hate linger in the darkness of our hearts, and without that light we are blinded by the darkness. Truly we are lost in the darkness of this world, but our hearts will lead us to a brighter future...TOGETHER. although somtimes the darkness may blind us, the light in our hearts will defeat any darkness that binds us.
i just hope anything ive said mightve helped u in some way, and let u know that even someone who has never met with u can care about ur wellbeing. to know that uve hurt ur self truly hurts me, and i wish to ease ur pain so mine might also weaken, in a sense thats selfish of me but we all do things for others in truth for ourselves weather we know it or not.
with love hope and friendship - hebidoshi - justin
Fionyac Says:
the emotions in this poem are very clear and obviously close to you, but i think some of it could be revised a bit. like:
"To do what i know
That shouldn't be done"
The "that" doesnt make sense. Also, maybe a bit more punctuation? cos it is a bit hard to know where the stresses are without it.
NoodleNeko Says:
:.: awwww