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Sorrow
Help me..
Im smothering..
Help me..
My trust is aflame..
Help me..
I'm alone...
Help me..
Before I die..
My heart cries out..
My mind screams..
I cry for you...
I scream for you...
but you leave me beaten...
I cannot take much more..
But now that you've returned...
Its to late...
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Comments
Lilium1 Says:
lovely poem!
Cat Megex Says:
I don't quite understand the "...trust is aflame..." line.
BracingHope Says:
aw its so sad
sad but beautiful
KiroGTZ Says:
Nice poem ^-^
reb29 Says:
Very nice poem! I'll help you in whatever problems you are going through, if any.
~reb29
Kairichan Says:
OoOoOOoO lovely ^^
veldrane Says:
touching
ShiningFaith Says:
How pretty, in a dark sorta way. That's why I like it though. It's dark yet there's hope There was hope until the very end when everything comes together, and you understand how the character feels. How hopeless the situation actually was. The character, knowing that the one person who could help them failed to do so. Even then they hold no grudge and feel no anger, they are simply disappointed, and the reader can feel it. It's very well written and has the potential to be published if you try.
Aika16 Says:
Awwww so sad but nice at the same time.
savedangel Says:
AHHHHH!! DON"T WORRY I'LL SAVE YOU!!! nice but very sad poem *tear develops in my eyes*