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The Beginning of Emotion
Glistened glow of the suns haunted kiss
as the lovers embrace
the once cursed mist of innocence
moving onward with the rush of dreams not yet promised.
vines entangle the hold of affection
pulling the two closer to their utopia of ever lasting sentiment
Lost in one anothers thoughts
to regain all truth in myth
believing only in what is seen through their emotions
Dancing lightly on the fields where the rose blooms; only to die
but a heart for one another lives longer than the ancient kings of open sorrow
and kindles the eternal flame
Forever in eachothers whisper
holding tightly to the joy of laughter
unruined by hatreds pull
allowing all to enter in to the enlightment of peace
copyright Valerie Long
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Comments
FaintWhispers Says:
Wow, this is very good and really emotional. I like your choice of words and the end of this is the part I like the best.
malice676767 Says:
Hey I like this one a lot. Im going to fav. And I like the picture too.
Bindi Says:
Gorgeous picture. Where did it come from? ::didn't read the writing::
black phoenix Says:
natural flow and rhythm. im impressed with your skills at being able to rhyme so effortlessly.
"unruined" in the second to last line could be changed, if youre up for making a slight revision. perhaps "untouched" would work?
also, the last line could work as: "allowing all to embrace the enlightment of peace"
overall, a well done piece of writing. thanks for sharing, nightowl.
Iarkalwen Says:
Beautiful
I love poetry, but I'm picky about what I like, and I LOVE this.
"pulling the two closer to their utopia of ever lasting sentiment" <=my favorite line
Wonderful job!
clarebrady Says:
*hugs poem like teddy bear* I love it so much!
Arson Says:
A good poem, I like the wording