An Untitled Future

by Drop of Red

in Completed Works

An Untitled Future

Every second washed down the drain
I cannot keep my eyes open
Another year to hide the pain
While I feel myself choking
Memories that I cannot seem to recall
And friends that once meant something to me
Parents who promised to catch me when I fall
While another god promised he'd help me see
Broken hearts hurt worse than shattered bones
There's no way to fix a broken life in a broken home
You can't try for for help when you feel all alone
Because everyone thinks there's something wrong with you
When there's no room left for love, what are you to do?
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Apr 4th 2005
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Yeah, I know it's not very good
So you don't have to comment if you don't want to
Heck, don't read it if you don't want to
It does mean something, it's about a life withering away
No this is not about me
Although I can definately think of some people who feel this way
If you read it, rather you enjoy it or not, please comment
Writers feel as though you don't respect them when you don't leave feedback
Like you care
Sorry if this submits twice, SA is acting really slow for me

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Froggie Says:

This really speaks to me, I like the ABAC ABAB AAACC rhyming scheme. At least, I think I presented the scheme right. Anyways, this is nicely written from a different perspective.

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boobookittyfuck Says:

i love this more than anything thing the site right now! im so faving it! absolutly amazing writing!

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AutumnFantasy Says:

I really like it. I wrote a long and very good essay about domestic violence in the home, and I know some of it first hand, so that really touches me close. It sounds like domestic abuse to me, at least.

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Andreja77 Says:

I feel the same way. I guess. anyways.

DesertFox Says:

Nifty one this time, you've got some sence there too. First one that actually hit me. Still the problem is that it's quit short, but anyways nifty work!