The Boy and Devil.

by GrungeIsntDead

in Completed Works

< 'Basement' by GrungeIsntDead

The Boy and Devil.

The landscapes of death are more soothing than he thought.
His nerves settle here, more than they were back home.
The devil came up to him with his hand extended.
He told him..."Welcome to your real home...this is where you belong"
As most people would find this ironic and chilling, he found it convincing.
He was at home, no he is at home. He felt a certain comfort near these flames.
For too many years he'd struggled with life’s purpose for himself.....
Now he knows, knows that he is meant for this loneliness and solitude.
He is meant for no reason but to sit in the bowels of the Earth lonely.

The devil gave the boy his gratitude, which is an odd case indeed.
Never before has this happened, but only to this boy.
This boy was special because god had been cruel to him. The devil knew this.
God made a fuck up of the boy, which drove him to suicide.
The devil extended his companionship to the boy, offered him power.
The boy wondered why the devil would be nice to an ordinary boy like him.
Only the devil knew, only because he feels the boy’s pain.
And has felt it....for an eternity the devil felt this pain...
The boy accepted this companionship and power, and was turned into great demon.
Only one demon had power more than this boy...and that was the devil himself.
Other demons would cower on sight of the 3 foot high boy.

And one day...the boy was told what god had done to him on purpose.
"You were his toy puppet boy...you were his entertainment..."
The boy was furious, god was supposed to be all good, not an evil part in him.
The whole world shook that day, as the boy unleashed his rage on the gates of heaven.
Then on that day the world stopped turning, and everybody felt a pain that day.
The days slowly got colder...and slowly got longer.
Until the day the universe stopped revolving, and life got longer. There was no more god, or heaven.
The 3 foot boy evolved into a monstrous killing machine that day and had killed god and destroyed heaven.
And now everybody on Earth had to live their life drifting towards the sun.
> 'Kurdt' by GrungeIsntDead
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Mature Mar 24th 2005
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short story i wrote.

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laughatthetards Says:

thats a really good picture.

alu Says:

At first I thought you wer switching tenses by accident, but then I realized it was for effect(I think )

Great job!

I think you mean to say: "and life was nolonger".
If you have some time on your hands, here's some constructive critisim:

Short. Amazing, unique idea, but you need to make it longer. It seems like there isn't enough in between the lines. If you extended this and described each event with detail, and perhaps added a bit, this could become an breathaking story.

i miss my cupcake Says:

wow, cool,really cool, yet deep