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Vampire Princess
She had always dreamed of the wolf. He was her
mythical lover and prince. He had always been there for
her and she knew he always would be. The wolf could
never express how he felt for her, for she belonged to
another. His heart was hers though. He so longed for the
day he could wrap his arms passionalty around her. He
loved her with all his heart and soul. He would give
his life for her to live if it was meant to be.
Months had passed and he was always with her. One day
out of the blue the two were alone in the flower
garden. She knelt by him and talked to him.“ My sweet
wolf, I so do wish you could understand me. I can not
explain it but I think you can. I love you sweet wolf. I
wish we could be together just the two of us. Even if
it was just for one day. I would love to know how
you feel for me and everything in your heart.” She
spoke to him. The wolf sat there and listened to her
with a longing and a desire of love. She walked away
and went bout tending to the flowers in the night air
and full moon. The wolf laid down and made a prayer
to the Wolf Gods. “ Wolf Gods you have heard her
words, please grant me this wish. I wish to be able to
be hers if for just one night please.” The wolf
sighed and laid down. He laid there and watched her walk
around. He was alert for any trouble. As the moon
approached over head he felt something inside him stir. He
became fearful and sat up. he suddenly realized he was
changing and saw hands and feet. He was fearful but quiet.
He knew his wish had been granted and wanted to
surprise the princess. Once he had fully changed he
approached her from behind. He gently reached out his hand
and touched her arm. She spun around scared. She was
bout to scream until she saw the eyes. “ Wolfy is that
you?” She was stunned.
I have had my wish granted to be with you if at
least for a night. I love you also my lady and like you
I have feelings for us. I have understood every
word you have ever said to me but could never express
my feelings.” He whispered to her. Wolf then gently
took her in his arms and kissed her passionalty. He
worked his way down her lips enjoying the sweet taste.
She returned the kisses with equal passion. He slowly
worked his way down and removed her cloak. It fell to
the ground slowly exposing her white and beautiful
shoulders. He gently kissed and bite each one. She shivered
with anticipation from the feeling going through her.
He then undid her dress. It also fell tot he ground
bearing her beautiful and voluptuous body. He slowly
kissed and licked his way down. He carefully sucked on
her breasts as her nipples ripened. He had never seen
anything so voluptuous and lovely. He continued to work
his way down and made his way to her hidden treasure.
He slowly brought her to the ground. He then allowed
his tongue to explore the treasure within. he licked
every inch she had to offer. Her eyes rolled back and
she let out a slight moan of pleasure. He looks up
and lets a smile fall on his face as he sees her
pleasure. He allows a fingers to explore within also. She
moans even louder and moves against the motions he
makes. The two could feel the earth move beneath them
slightly. He enjoyed her treasure she had to offer then she
allowed him to taste her nectar. He eagerly drank it all.
He continued his ferrous conquest, he had the sweet
nectar and now desired even more. He let his tongue
travel down one of her legs then back up. He then did
the same to the other. He worked his way back up to
enjoy more nectar but she pulled him and kissed him
passionatly. She then took her turn on him. She slowly kissed
down his chest and bit him. She sucked the blood out
of passion and desire. She did not let a drop go to
waste and she kissed the bite mark. She worked her way
down to his staff of life. She licked and kissed it
slowly to give him pleasure. As she engulfed the staff
he could smell her. She smelled like the sweet scent
of vanilla. He let out a howl of pleasure and
ecstasy. She worked his staff for a bit and he carefully
pulled her up to him. He kissed her and rolled her over
on her back. He slowly slide inside her. She gasped
as he entered her. The princess arched her back with
his movement. He slowly thrust deep and hard in her.
Her heart pounded as the made a bonding of the souls.
They both breathed heavily and moved as one. The wolf
thirsted deeper into her. She Started to shake and then
essences to flow. She moved faster and faster as the wolf
started to do the same. He finally exploded in a heat of
passion inside her. He slid off her and kissed her gently
and held her tight. Come moving they awoke and he was
the wolf again. Or was he twenty-eight days later he
was back. The Gods had granted their wish and allows
it to happen every twenty-eight days. Or so I have
been told bout the start of the Garou.
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Comments
Midnight Fury Says:
The story itself has the authentic fairy tale vibe to it. Something like you would seen in REAL fairy tales and not those that have been made "suitable" for children. For the most part, anyway... However, the focus of the story doesn't seem to be so much on the wolf getting together with the love of his life, but more on just getting his wish to have sex with the girl. If this was your actual intention, then that works just fine.
Here are a few corrections you may want to consider:
The story starts off in third person, but then when the sexual part of it begins to take place, you switch to a present-tense style. Instead of something like, "He watched her walk." you're using, "He watches her walk."
The actual words used for sexual actions or parts of the body are alright. I didn't find anything all that crude in this story. So that was a very good improvement.
There were a few times when you forgot to mark your character's speech with quotes. There are a few other little errors like those, like typing mistakes. But those are easy enough to go back and fix.