-layers of ash-

by black phoenix

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-layers of ash-

i hold your charred heart, lovingly running fingers through layers of ash.
i clean the scarred surface, brushing away dusty memories.

i kindle your flames.. slowly.
gently glowing, you encompass me, filling with warmth.

for a few precious hours, you shed the burdens of your past.
your pain, forgotten, leaves you free to smile and love.

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Feb 7th 2005
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this is the first romantic poetry that i have ever written. yes, ill admit its a bit cliche(unavoidable), but i dont really care. i gave this to my certain someone and he enjoyed it very much.. it feels good knowning that he appreciates it more than most since he is a poet as well.

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buns of doom Says:

Very nice! Kind of a dark love. Love the build-up from the middle paragraph to the end. Sounds like your in love! Good luck!

virginheart Says:

I really dont think its cliche. I think it is very good, also well written.

DearestHelpless Says:

Don't think this is cliche, avoided that through the dark edge of the imagery. This is amazingly good for a first time love poem... so tender yet think i might have to fav this, the more i read it the more i love it
k x