< 'Ferral Flurry' by DarkPhyre024

Finally

Finally

Today I finally let them fall
like acid burning against my skin
They'd answered my emotion's call
dripped down my cheek and off my chin

Today I finally let it out
everything that'd burned within
I'd put an end to the drought
by letting go what I'd held in

Today I finally broke the dam
letting me drown this city of pain
by floating debris of hurt I swam
pushing against this acid rain

Today I finally layed me down
I've been defeated by these tears
inside I try to rebuild this town
that was destroyed by all my fears

Today I finally released my hold
watching everything float away
as sad as I am, to watch them go
I'm glad to finally see today
> '.: obscurity :.' by DarkPhyre024

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Jan 28th 2005
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I hold on to what hurts me, mainly because I dont think I deserve to feel anything else.

Now, I've not completely let go of everything that brings me down, but for the first time in ages, it did take its toll on me today, and I let alot of built up emotion out....

......in the form of much needed tears

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Aquacoon Says:

Wow. You can really feel the weight of the tears. The word acid works really well, you can really imagine what it feels like, the regret and the pain that comes with crying, but the relief it brings.

And the word debri helps to give them a gritty heavy feeling even though theyre just tears, it helps you focus in on them, and you get the sense of cleansing and a clean slate at the end. and that you actualy needed to cry.

*slurps* beutiful poem mister roo. ^^