Really nice, I think for me it got better half way through. But maybe for me it just felt like the opening is a little to bitter sweet. Its a nice contrast to the later half, but personally I don't dig the bitter sweet :V
I really like the visual imagery, it makes me reminiscent of Shakespeare's Sonnet 18 (and another fellow, but I can't recall his name.) If you haven't read it yet, do so! I'm sure you'll love it.
Hopefully you two will do more of these, they are great, and almost as though they were written by one mind. Applause!!!
Comments
Kodfish Says:
always tryin' to catch you collabin' dirty
Zetsubou Eureka Says:
Printscreened from Etherpad?
XxSoulfulAngelxX Says:
I sees yous collabin', i be hatin.
That's really good lol. keep up the awesomeness.
Reminds me of luv!
takekate Says:
Fucking perfect.
/uprates even with score disabled
Gah you guys flow together so well and I really can't tell who wrote what.
P i m p Hollystika Says:
Beautiful ; - ;
Hean Says:
EMOTIONS!
Cray Says:
I waaaaas there. (sorta)
But my my you two really do flow together insanely well
Really nice, I think for me it got better half way through. But maybe for me it just felt like the opening is a little to bitter sweet. Its a nice contrast to the later half, but personally I don't dig the bitter sweet :V
I really like the visual imagery, it makes me reminiscent of Shakespeare's Sonnet 18 (and another fellow, but I can't recall his name.) If you haven't read it yet, do so! I'm sure you'll love it.
Hopefully you two will do more of these, they are great, and almost as though they were written by one mind. Applause!!!
TruVKKamikaze Says:
Really nice.
I love the way you both wrote it and the imagery is stunning. I had to read it over and over again cause I was addicting.
So close to popping some popcorn, stuffing my face, and saying over and over "this is so good!"
photoxsquish Says:
That is so beautiful.
And it makes me want to write.
But I don't have time to write, 'cause I'm in school.
DAMMIT OTL