+Your eyes+

by Lost Love 27

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+Your eyes+

We were watching the sun rise,
Over these boring, gray skies.
When I looked into your eyes,
I saw you wore a disguise.

Something you hid from me,
But I could never see,
That I now hold the key,
That could set your heart free.

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Jul 28th 2009
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Woke up with this forming in my head. So I gave it a shot to bloom.
I'm trying to pay more attention to syllable flow, but I think there are some grammar issues in this.


General critique, please.

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