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Black Fire
Sitting all alone,
Sitting here, on my empty throne,
No friends to call,
No games to play
Another Hollow word
Another shattered heart
I get up from the chair,
and try to walk around,
I trip and I fall,
For I am blind and bound,
I hate the darkness,
I cannot bear the light,
I want out
I want to fight
You can help me,
You say You will,
I wish to believe it so,
For I’ve had my fill
I can no longer speak with truth
Nor act without lies
I cannot create with passion
Nor severe these ties.
At night I cry for a miracle,
I believe will not come,
I want to sing praises,
But my tongue is numb,
Perpetual mourning,
Forever grieving,
In pain and in loss,
I turn and I toss.
Yea though I am blind,
I see those who are blinder,
Those who accept this hell is good,
Yet inside they should be wiser
I want to call to them,
I wish to give aid,
But I cannot speak to them in truth,
For my wisdom I have paid
Since my words are meaningless
And my thoughts insincere,
I use the words of my hands,
In action and thought clear
Please hear this,
and see my heart,
And please in Thy Mercy
Swift aid depart.
A miracle I crave,
Freedom I desire,
From a Hell of my own making,
This grave of black fire.
For I will be sitting here all alone,
Sitting here, on my this entombed throne,
No love to call
No cheers to make
Another muffled prayer,
Another regretted curse.
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Comments
Major Says:
This actually reminds me of some of the Psalms. I love this!
benanderson Says:
The mood seems to swing rather wildly.
You start off with it sounding like a some kind of fantasy novel, then you jump into deep depression, then you throw in some old English, pick up the mood then drop back into depression again at the end. It doesn't flow very well and because of that I'm finding it difficult to follow. I'm not really sure of the theme, story and/or message you are trying to portray. You need to try and keep future works more consistent.
Also, you have two glaring grammatical errors (yea and blinder). You should fix that.
Heiges Says:
Wow! This is really good!
Yowl Says:
Feels kinda depressing, but it is still damn good :]