not creatve characters have the motion of a brick, and each and every panel looks just the same, its like the guy in the second panel "cant be arsed" like you said that when making a comic, true you made an attempt but its... lacking in alot of areas
It shows promise (this strip is much better than the first), but you really, really need to work on posing. Most of the poses for the characters seem unnatural.
A spellchecker wouldn't hurt, either. "All right" is two words, "They're" should replace "There" in the last panel, and punctuation is really inconsistent (and occasionally wrong).
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Tau22 Says:
Ummm... right...
turnbull Says:
not creatve characters have the motion of a brick, and each and every panel looks just the same, its like the guy in the second panel "cant be arsed" like you said that when making a comic, true you made an attempt but its... lacking in alot of areas
SailorPoipoi Says:
IT has potential. The dialoge just feels a lil flat. The guy on the very right is at times confusing
Its still good work. Plus its always good to experiment and have fun!
Inter Says:
It shows promise (this strip is much better than the first), but you really, really need to work on posing. Most of the poses for the characters seem unnatural.
A spellchecker wouldn't hurt, either. "All right" is two words, "They're" should replace "There" in the last panel, and punctuation is really inconsistent (and occasionally wrong).