Edit: There will be a resubmission of this - see bottom.
This image is 25% of my actual image, if anyone wants closeups or a cropped desktop background I will probably put up something like that after I get my next critique.
I get a lot of "where do you come up with this?" comments so...
Background behind the image:
With plastic surgery becoming more and more commonplace and advanced, physical flaws are easily removed to help people achieve that flawless or ideal beauty that so many strive for. However, as more and more prosthetic parts and chips are embedded to "help" remove those human flaws and perform human functions they eventually grow their own mind continue what she had started along the road to "Perfection" replacing everything unnecessary or displeasing. Now, trapped in a partially prosthetic body, she watches, helpless, as her body makes adjustments to itself to try to reach that "perfection".
Edit: Thank you very much to m u Dlo Bst Er for the very helpful critique of this as well as being an awesome SA member of the SA Cast. If anyone else has critiques they want to send in my direction they would be more than welcome!
Re-Edit: Thank you to Asomatous as well for a very very thorough helpful critique of this project. In light of what they have pointed out to me there will be, for sure, another update of this project if I can get my butt in gear and address the issues they have pointed out to me.
Comments
VampiricTwilight Says:
When I saw this, I was amazed at this. It looks great. I love the anatomy and the colouring. It just has this odd feeling to it that just makes me want to stare at it for a while. I really like it.
Crimson Howl Says:
WOW! Thanks for sharin' this! Glad to see someone who thinks about the story a picture tells.
DarkRubyEyz Says:
WOW. I love the reality you bring forth in this!
solimphade Says:
Awesome!
I loved watching this piece come together.
As for the explanation, very cool. I like the idea, as creepy as it is. >>
Rin Who Says:
I agree with everyone who just commented. I love seeing artwork Like this on sheezy! The detail you put in this, the way you were able to create the look and feel of an actual persons anatomy, and the message that comes with it~ honest to gawd nice job.
pizzacats Says:
one word: hot.
KimilouLuvsPie Says:
o_o this is very nice, it is taking your comment to the extreme by removing her arm but it is very beautiful owo
brandi3981 Says:
great message peice the one i did was of kids wanting to grow up to fast & i did that by drawing eevee evolution babies with a eevee mother
asomatous Says:
[in response to your forum post in my thread]
first of all, what major do you plan to follow? you have some great potential, but you're making a lot of basic mistakes from foregoing thorough training in realism [from observation]. Illustration or graphic novels, i'm thinking?
no matter which major you're aiming at, colleges want to see mostly drawings frm observation in portfolios. no drawings or paintings from photographs. they tend to shun anime/manga, any stylized cartoon work, and digital drawing/painting.
right now in the illustration world, digital painting and drawing are only really acceptable in video/computer gaming design and/or graphic novels. The rest of the world wants traditional, surprisingly.
anyway, as for the image itself, nice sense of form, space and anatomy, but what really kills this piece is the lack of light source. you painted a very direct light source with the ceiling lamps, but very few of the highlights, shadows, or reflective lights follow it. your objects seem as though they are floating because they lack reflective lihts in te shadows. the cast-shadows are too hazy for a light source that is so low hung. such a light source would cause a spiral of linear shadows to eminate from each object's foot.
the cast-shadows don't follow the shapes of the forms from which they originate. from this positioning, the monitor of the lap-top would have a bit of a cast shadow o itself, as it is slightly back-lit.
the linear perspective is completely off. you've got the idea, with objects being angled to move back into space, but they follow no distinct horizon. [the machine in the foreground would be angled a lot more]
other than that, the symbolism is neat, but nothing in this world makes sense. for such a high-tech cybernetic operation, their machinery is pretty basic [laptop and desktop???] and they are proportionately too small for her size.
the girl is rendered well, but what's going on with her hair? there are objects strewn about, but they are carefully balanced in such a way as to contradict her pose. how is the flesh/cloth draped vertically and that ball sitting so peacefully when she seems to be rushing about in a fit of confusion and rage/horror? and that's another thing: her pose is empowering, but this is a piece about powerlessness. you have to choose a pose that fits the subject/theme. look up body language to find poses more fitting to this story. her limbs are free to run or move, so how is she a prisoner? she's larger than her hair. for the point you're trying to make, it seems as though her hair should be the largest/longest part of her body, and should tear more than just her arm to shreds. to really make an impact, attack the breasts [so many women get breast implants] or nose [rhinoplasty is just as popular]. look up Jenny Saville's work- she explores plastic surgery as well and is a top artist of today that you should know.
the hand is also rendered well, but the spider makes no sense. it also slows down the action of the scene by being vertical, plus it seems to be hanging from blood?
and for her arm to be ripped to shreads during the operation, her hair seems to be neatly applied to her body without bloodshed. this just seems inconsistant.
the brush strokes right behind her imply perspective lines that rush to the background, and it seems as though there would be more tools lying about on the table than just one scalple and screws. she looks like she was lying down somewhere... where's the bed? how did she break free?
even if the work is full of symbols and metaphors, fantasy drawings/paintings have to make sense. their stories need to have understandable substance within them, just like written tales or movies.
and stick to the script, don't let a thirst for drama cloud your judgement and concept. facts are more important when you're trying to be compelling.
check out conceptart.org. they specialize in these sort of scenes and subjects, and you could learn a lot from studying that school of painting.
good luck and if you want some more advice on art schools, i know a lot of them and will help you out all i can.
MadamBoss Says:
OMG Pat that's fucking GORGEOUS o_o