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Die
Die my Child
In thoughts of sin
When light fails to guide
And Darkness begins
Die my Mother
As the seas rage red
While dreams of blood
Run through my head
Die my Brother
You’ve not been true
My hate revolves
Around not just you
Die my Sister
Give up this day
The path you had made
Has lost its way
Die my Father
With no salvation
Where will you go?
But the land of Temptation
I’ve killed you all
And served him well
You cried to me
As Darkness fell
I did this to you
So now you’ll see
The God you trusted
Was a mistake to believe.
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Comments
Zion Netrunner Says:
Not bad, not bad at all! My main criticism would be that you don't need to capitalize every line in a poem (hard thing to get, if you're using something like Word). If the first word isn't at the beginning of a sentence or shouldn't otherwise be capitalized, you can leave it as is. So:
"I did this to you,
so now you'll see. . ."