Prologue

by tjtum15

in Storys

Prologue

In the Hidden leaf village there was a young blond haired boy with weird chakara his chakara could form wings like a dragon’s at the age of two the young boy learned how to use a jutsu called: ‘Shadow Gate’ a jutsu that can be walked through or hold stuff in it this young boy’s name was Taylor Kido his birth Parents were unkowned to anyone of the Village so the Third Hokage took him in as the Third Hokage watched Taylor grow up he noticed his strange and unusual chakara.
“Taylor? Taylor? Now where did that boy run off to?” The Third asked Kakashi of the anbu black ops “I don’t know Lord Hokage.” Kakashi told the Third.
Taylor was just five at the time when Konohamore was born at the age of 12 Taylor was put into the Anbu black ops since he could all ready out mover any regular Jonin in the village even the Special Jonins had a hard time keeping up with him.
Taylor looking at a map this was the day of the chunnin exams “where should I go to? Maybe go watch the exams nah I will wait for the final match to watch.” Taylor wasn’t the only blond haired ninja in the village there was two others Ino, and Naruto.
Taylor rarely got out doing anything since he was busy with most of the paper work for the Anbu.
Taylor was grumbling since Kakashi wasn’t apart of the Anbu anymore “why do I have to do this stuff?” sighing again finishing the last for the paper work looking up then grabbing his mask putting it on hated the rule that he must keep his face consoled.
Sighing long as Taylor headed to his apartment “why was the reason I joined up with the Abu again?” asking himself out loud as he entered.
Taylor’s Katana he nicked named it the dragon-blade since he could use one of his jutsus the dragon fang on it the amount of chakara for his age was impressive.
Taylor quickly got his Nickname though out the other villages fast as the dragon of the leaf.

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Jan 16th 2009
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its my first naruto story.

you know who owns naruto... so dont try to be asses about me giving cridts.

Comments

Vulpix the Lonely Says:

Hm, not to sound strange but "Taylor" doesn't fit in Naruto world at all. I mean, they're all from Japan. I can't possibly imagine ho "Taylor" is a japanese name xD Anyway, you might want to separate the sentences a bit more, it's hard to read this way.

Also

It's "Chakra" not "chakara"
"Konohamore" is "Konohamaru"

It would also be good if you didn't start so many sentences with his name "Taylor did... Taylor said.. Taylor etc"

Other than that, interesting idea with this chakra forming a special shape. Kinda like Naruto has his Kyuubi when he enrages

I think it's gonna be a good story but you need to work on it

P.S.: If you don't want me to critique anything, say so. :) I won't do it anymore if you don't want me to

Shadow Dinosaur Says:

I have to agree with Vulpix the Lonely on the name. It seems too 21st century for a ninja name.