Jan 14th 2009
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I've been in a bit of a slump for the past few months (who doesn't have those?), and I think some honest critique will snap me out of it. I've taken no formal classes in art, let alone comic design and it shows. That's the problem, and I'm reaching for a solution...or at least a band-aid.
So here's what I would like from you: Any critique/advice on the
Layout: Bubble placement, frame placement and type, anything else you can think of.
Toning: Good God, please help. Should I just make my own? I feel like none of mine match. Anyway, toning techniques/crits. I feel like I am completely lost in this area, esp. with background tones...
Sound effects: I can't ever seem to get the right effect with my sounds. I've fiddled with different fonts and shapes. Maybe there's really nothing, but I feel like a good sound effect should be invisible yet still give you the sound and effect.....if anyone understands that....
Advance comic critique is preferred, but constructive crit is ok too. I don't need critique on artwork/style/plot or personal lifestyle kthnx
Thank you for any help, I hope this works.
Comments
Katrina Says:
Not being an expert either, I'm probably not going to be a ton of help. The only place that it feels like the background isn't working in on the right side where she's coming out of the bushes. It looks a bit like she has half a body, rather than half of its hidden if that makes any sense. Maybe if there were lines around the leaves nearest to her that would work better?
Hope at least that much is helpful.
nindo Says:
I have problems following what's going on.
First, is it right to left or left to right?
Im not sure if I would be able to follow it better if there were speech in the bubbles or not, but my guess is yeah.
Artwise I would add alot more pure blacks to create a nicer contrast between the greys.
And if Im not all out on a whim, I think you've used Opencanvas. atleast for the lineart?
well it doesnt matter, what I want to say about the lines is that you should ink with a harder brush, as it is now the lineart looks kinda blurred at some places.
Also the faces between boys and girls are kinda indistinguishable.
Xiao Feng Fury Says:
I just have a few problems following the direction of the panels. I like the manga look indeed,( I still have yet to get that effect. SO maybe you can show me how!) but I think there is also too much going on within the background. The leaf transparencies, for instance.
PsychoCaptain Says:
You should make the page layout more simple. There is no need to have every single frame overlaping another or to use gradients and patterns on every bacground. Try using simple square panels whith white gutters in between once in a while.