fall

by jack h

in Completed Works

< 'Lady Lion' by jack h

fall

i slip
you trip
we stumble

down

d
o
w
n

steep hill
there's blood!
police arrive
they speak
voices soft
they worry
about me
i'm fine
and you?
and you?
and you?

they say
broken neck
you're gone
but why?
love you
i do
and then
this happens
all gone
just because
we fall.
> 'AXISSSSSSSSSSS for Anzlem WIP' by jack h

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Oct 30th 2008
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This was something random I whipped up because I saaw a neat little group on Webook where you write poetry, two words per line.

SO.

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Zetsubou Eureka Says:

I fell down a.......wait, that was rolling.....and it was fun.
Nice poem.

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koshizzle Says:

i'll get to fixing it with vinegar and brown paper!

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Satchan Says:

Duct tape fixes everything!

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Nesnja Says:

whoa... nicely done, love~

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EvilGrinn Says:

The murmur is the only word I didn't like, but otherwise.

You can read this as it is. or you can read the deeper, perhaps unintended meaning.
Anyway, whatever conclusion I make out of this, I just love it.

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