The Suino Love Poems

by Denryu

in Completed Works

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The Suino Love Poems

I Loved You First

Don’t talk to me like your heart is
the only one that’s
breaking.

I loved you first.

One rainy day at the hospital
your mud-happy fingertips smeared a smile
on my window.
It was then.
Long before we ever learned to say ‘hello’.

When it comes to you,
I’m no longer a man.
Look!
You’ve got me writing poetry!


I Loved You More

Look!
You’ve got me writing poetry!
I guess there’s
no point in denying it now.

Ever since I gave you my heart
the one I got back’s been
broken.

You won’t even look me in the eye.
I guess it’s true:

I loved you more.

Now there’s no way to compensate
for all the time we lost
over the years.

I Loved You Back

Over the years
I’ve been waiting for you
to make the first move,
so I could say that
I loved you back.

I’m still waiting.


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Sep 30th 2008
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Bleh, I don't know how to make things look tabbed on SA, so these don't look as neat and fancy anymore. Without tabs, some of the breaks in these probably look pretty bizarre, but you'll still get the basic point right? Right. At least I hope so.

Anyway, this is sort of one poem in three parts, but each part stands alone as its own poem too. I hope I pulled that off the way I planned.

They're poems about characters belonging to me and a long time buddy of mine, Aaya: http://aayatan.sheezyart.com/.

Her character, Subei, is sort of an over-emotional musician, and mine, Inoki is what I like to call a loveable jackass. We played them together for the first time probably four or five years ago and they had such great chemistry they've sort of been soulmates ever since--except they can never get their shit together and own up to it! Disagreeable bastards.

Anyway, that's what led to the 'Suino' love poems.

'I loved you first' is Inoki's persepective.
'I loved you more' is Subei's.
'I loved you back' is both.

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