Have some poems.

by Satchan

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Have some poems.

I fished once
with an old man
we found
seaweed
seaweed
seaweed
and a shoe
no fish, but that was all right
I did not like the thought of stealing their breath
for my table
at the grocery store, there are fish
that someone else has already made into objects



When I was small, I went fishing
with my grandfather
I didn't understand how he could sit there so patiently
just sit
for hours
we caught no fish
my father told a story about
a man who fished in the same lake for thirty years
and never caught a thing
then they came out with a study
that realized the lake had no fish
he never fished again
> 'Rant' by Satchan

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Sep 13th 2008
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So I did these for creative writing class. We were supposed to pick an object off the table and write two poems related to it: one that was vague, and one that was more precise. I picked a fishing lure.

They aren't much good cause I suck at poetry, but I haven't submitted anything in awhile, so I figured I might as well.

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pur plec loud Says:

I loooooooooove the first one

...the second one is sad D:

Become So Numb Says:

I like them, they're really good

Solar Z Says:

They're not bad. I can't get anything like that...

Lilac Wood Says:

In the first, I like the repetition of seaweed. It made me sort of feel a passing of time, the motion of sending out the line and wheeling it in over and over for just seaweed. And a shoe. I agree that the second is sad, and yet it also has a sort of humor to it.