This is a something

by Akillian

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This is a something

This is a something to show I'm alive
A something to show I still thrive.
This is something to dust off the pages
After all, it HAS been ages.
Update the gallery and show something new
Something to improve, to interest you.
This is my cry--
--"I'm not dead!'"
My cry that I cry from my bed.
This is a something crafted from words
perhaps not an image, but just as good.
> Puppet

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Aug 30th 2008
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alive general im still
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Yeah. Just something to show that yes, I'm still alive.

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Blumoomoo Says:

nicely said

Furcifer07 Says:

i hope you don't mind my critiquing you.... You start out so strong and I expect such a BAM, but as the poem draws on it seems like you're just trying to complete the rhyme, which yes is the fact, but the transition need some work. I love, though, the idea.