Here's chapter 1! Boring, yes, I know. Just need to build up background for the story. Every detail here is important,

In the next chapter: We go into Yael's individuality a bit more, we're introduced to more concepts, new characters, and *gasp* tensions arise! It'll start to get interesting, just you see! DX
P.S. One more reference: For the "They passed through gates, but they were not made of marble." Some of you may have noticed that that is oddly familiar. I got the idea from this one guy talking about seeing adds of coming to America and walking up golden stairs. Part of his quote," I walked up stairs, but they were not golden." Something like that. The first part of the quote was along the lines of," I dreamed of journeying to America and greeting my Uncle upon golden stairs" I dun' remember! But I loved the idea,and thus, reused it.
Comments
Fanime234 Says:
I didn't really like the story until the VERY last sentance. "He only had a few personal servants, and they never left His side, until now. Why? Because the end of the world had just begun."

That got me hooked. Good job!
KyoKuddler Says:
PLEASE READ THIS CRAP! THIS IS THE DESCRIPTION FOR THE PREVIEW I DELETED. IT'S GOT IMPORTANT CRAP:Um, last minute title change. Before, it was "Please Fly To The Heavens" but that's too long, too sappy, and not named after a Muse song,
. Let's see... This is about an "angel" if you will, a servant of God. She's very obedient and serious, and works hard to please him. The plot is that he's just decided that the world is too corrupt to continue, and the ease the innocent's suffering, he should end the world. With the servants' help of course. So she is sent to Earth with a few others, to find who is Pure and who is Corrupted. I haven't totally gotten the plot fixed, but I already have the basic plotline sketched out. I expect this to be around 5-10 chapters long. ^^ There’s much, much more to the plot, but I can’t say~ And here's the list of references:
-Afterworld is based lightly on Soul Society from Bleach (parts of the concept, inculding how the families are arranged)
-I imagined God's palace to be like the Sun God's Temple from Fullmetal Alchemist, only better ;D
-I will be taking ideas from the Bible, like in Godchild. So yes, as it ties together, it will be a little confusing unless you are a scholar. (I had to research stuff on wikipedia, and my brain HURTS)
-Apocalypse themed songs by Muse (inspiration)
-Clamp’s Wish series (Lots of similar ideas)
Not much else to say, except please read!
natsumi456 Says:
Really good, but short. But hey, my stories are short, so why am I complaining? I have no idea!! Great Job!
Neji Luver101 Says:
Kewl :3 It's gonna be interesting