Time Is Running Out Ch.1

by KyoKuddler

in Completed Works

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Time Is Running Out Ch.1

“It is time. The world is corrupted and the suffering must be put to an end,” A booming voice announced, bouncing off invisible walls, “Yael, your task is to allow the pure souls to Heaven and to lead the sinners to Hell. First, you must descend to Earth, as the duty requires, and awaken your powers in your new body. Then, you will complete your task. Others will be joining you soon.”
“Yes, I will do all I can to succeed, Lord.” Yael replied. “I will prepare for departure.” She raised her lowered head and nodded to the powerful figure, half hidden in the shadows, and left for her quarters in the palace.
Heaven, as the humans called it, was a district similar to their own world. There were differences, but it was certainly recognizable. The Pure would pass through marble gates and be assigned a house with an adopted family. These makeshift families never knew each other in their previous lives, because it was forbidden; Heaven was supposed to be a fresh start for the worthy. The homes were comfortable, food never spoiled, and their eternal lives were simple with no modern complications. People merely ate for pleasure, nothing ever got dirty and they never got tired.
The Corrupted, the sinners of the past world on Earth, were not so lucky. They would be dragged to the only other district in the afterlife, Hell. This section of the city was walled off and completely isolated from the rest of the city. The residents lived in dark, damp cells and slept on cold, hard mats. They could get tired. They could get dirty and hungry. They could die. No one could escape and the only visitors were the ones who brought them there and the servants who took care of them; until they were executed, that is. They passed through gates, but they were not made of marble.
The whole place resembled an ancient Greek city, with one large sanctuary to worship the God. He wasn’t exactly like anyone had imagined, but he was similar to the God of the many religions practiced on Earth and was accepted by the people. He had a large palace with impossibly tall pillars and gorgeous gardens filled with exotic creatures never seen before. Many citizens took on jobs similar to the ones of their past, but the purest worked for the Lord Himself. He only had a few personal servants, and they never left His side, until now. Why? Because the end of the world had just begun.

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Aug 20th 2008
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Here's chapter 1! Boring, yes, I know. Just need to build up background for the story. Every detail here is important, In the next chapter: We go into Yael's individuality a bit more, we're introduced to more concepts, new characters, and *gasp* tensions arise! It'll start to get interesting, just you see! DX
P.S. One more reference: For the "They passed through gates, but they were not made of marble." Some of you may have noticed that that is oddly familiar. I got the idea from this one guy talking about seeing adds of coming to America and walking up golden stairs. Part of his quote," I walked up stairs, but they were not golden." Something like that. The first part of the quote was along the lines of," I dreamed of journeying to America and greeting my Uncle upon golden stairs" I dun' remember! But I loved the idea,and thus, reused it.

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Fanime234 Says:

I didn't really like the story until the VERY last sentance. "He only had a few personal servants, and they never left His side, until now. Why? Because the end of the world had just begun."

That got me hooked. Good job!

KyoKuddler Says:

PLEASE READ THIS CRAP! THIS IS THE DESCRIPTION FOR THE PREVIEW I DELETED. IT'S GOT IMPORTANT CRAP:Um, last minute title change. Before, it was "Please Fly To The Heavens" but that's too long, too sappy, and not named after a Muse song, . Let's see... This is about an "angel" if you will, a servant of God. She's very obedient and serious, and works hard to please him. The plot is that he's just decided that the world is too corrupt to continue, and the ease the innocent's suffering, he should end the world. With the servants' help of course. So she is sent to Earth with a few others, to find who is Pure and who is Corrupted. I haven't totally gotten the plot fixed, but I already have the basic plotline sketched out. I expect this to be around 5-10 chapters long. ^^ There’s much, much more to the plot, but I can’t say~ And here's the list of references:
-Afterworld is based lightly on Soul Society from Bleach (parts of the concept, inculding how the families are arranged)
-I imagined God's palace to be like the Sun God's Temple from Fullmetal Alchemist, only better ;D
-I will be taking ideas from the Bible, like in Godchild. So yes, as it ties together, it will be a little confusing unless you are a scholar. (I had to research stuff on wikipedia, and my brain HURTS)
-Apocalypse themed songs by Muse (inspiration)
-Clamp’s Wish series (Lots of similar ideas)
Not much else to say, except please read!

natsumi456 Says:

Really good, but short. But hey, my stories are short, so why am I complaining? I have no idea!! Great Job!

Neji Luver101 Says:

Kewl :3 It's gonna be interesting