Aftermath

by Katrina

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< 'Chibi Chibi in the Sandbox' by Katrina

Aftermath

[size=14]Don't think I don't see through you
I've known you far too long
You can't hide your fear deep enough that I couldn't find it

You see, you're not so worried about how you'll get around
Despite appearances, your body is strong
You will adjust
You're scared of what people will do when they see you
And their eyes don't fall to your face anymore
But to that chair you seem to wake up cursing every morning
And they'll always smile, always laugh
Won't say a word about it
Heaven forbid they'd start an argument with such a frail little thing as you

Don't think I'll treat you so sugar-sweet
If you tease me, I'll do it back
Play a prank, and you'll get the return ten-fold
Those nights we stayed up tickling each other until the tears fell,
They won't change either.
There's no shadow on my emotions
Anytime you need someone to laugh with, fight with, cry with, I'm here
Because I'm your big sister[/size]
> 'The Race' by Katrina

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Jun 16th 2008
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family family free verse human nature poetry
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One more poem. Arg! Now I don't know if I should enter this one or my last one into the poetry contest! This one's got more feeling, but it's less, well, poetic. Anyone want to pick for me?

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Alexiel Krahe Says:

Although I'm supposed to be your rival =D due the contest (The fact nobody commented my own Contest piece annoys me)-

I think this poem isn't less "poetic"- It's written in a modern language, just like you would normally talk to a younger brother, and that fits. I also like the theme- Too bad so little people find it relevant to write to their brothers/sisters.
Though, it still lacks an edge. A point. Something that would make it memorable.