This was supposed to be written to go with a drawing I've been working on (that will be posted shortly). Enjoy, and comments/ratings are appreciated ^^
The preview image is (c) Pat Murdough
the poem is (c) haleybird. Stealing will be punished
The whole theme of this poem isn't exactly my cup of tea, but I do however admit that this is well written.
The whole repetition of "the ____ king of _____ times" really kept the piece together.
The third stanza of this kinda fell apart rhythm wise, up until that point it was easy and fun to read, then it kinda crashed and you had to re-read it, so I suggest playing around with the wording there.
Over all good job! (sorry if I sound so analytical, school eats my brains)
Comments
sweetbelle Says:
neato
the jaws theme was going thru my head while i was reading down- idk y, lol. 
but suspenseful, good job! can't wait to see ur drawing!
sirrush Says:
The whole theme of this poem isn't exactly my cup of tea, but I do however admit that this is well written.
(sorry if I sound so analytical, school eats my brains)
The whole repetition of "the ____ king of _____ times" really kept the piece together.
The third stanza of this kinda fell apart rhythm wise, up until that point it was easy and fun to read, then it kinda crashed and you had to re-read it, so I suggest playing around with the wording there.
Over all good job!