Woohoo, I'm submitting something! Yes, it as a rare thing because I'm busy and lazy

at the same time? Yes, children, at the same time. At school we're preparing for another test week and the finals and at home I want to rest, but also want to work at my fantasy story. I don't know how many people already saw my forum topic, but I said I'd maybe translate an old piece of writing, so that people could judge my English.
So, here it is! The story is originally longer, but I though this would be enough of an example. If some people are interested though, I could always translate the rest!
The story is called crawling and was inspired on a remix version of the song Crawling, by Linkin Park. I so love that song, the first time hearing it gave me goose bumps, but I love it!
Please, don't hold back on critics. But, I only want critics about my English and not about the contents. I wrote it 2 years ago or so
Thanks for reading!
Comments
miragecat Says:
wow, awesome! very descriptive too!