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{ My Immortal Sky }
My immortal sky will never die
It holds the universe within
The stars keep our light alive
As they dance across my sky
As i sit on the ground, looking up in the dark
What could I possibly see?
My deepened dark dreary sky
Will forever look over me
A gentle breeze, blows over my knees
and up and through my beloved body
It made my skin tingle and creep
Im am so tierd, I need my sleep
Though I cannot look away from the sight
I am mezmerized by its beautiful light
My mind is wondering...Wondering how
How can I keep this night?
My immortal sky will never die
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Comments
Cyril Says:
And it worked much. Very lovely. Some of the rhythm was weird to me, but it was a solid poem.
NOT AN EMO Says:
... you're real good at doing poems.
Jasuperu Says:
...sooooo beautiful, made me havin'tears in me eyes!
LonelyCatAngelKaty Says:
i love it it made me close my eyes as imanging the same thing it felt like i was there
NeedleAndThread Says:
Oh my god This is so beautiful!


I love it to peices. This should get featured or front page. Even though it is short... ^^
cellieruru Says:
You've gotten so much better!
I'm so proud of you~~~
sugarcrazedduckie Says:
I really like the meanings in this poem. well written. and you're definitely improving.