Don't hurt me...

She leaned against the wall. Her arms hugging herself. Eyes cast downward. He approached her asking
" What's wrong?"
She looked up with a smile masking her misery and replyed, without making eye contact,
" Nothing."
She looked down again. He appered next to her. He gently lifted her head so she was looking him in the eye.
" Tell the truth."
He said, with a concerned look on his face.
She said, with a small sigh
" Everything. I'm scared...and I don't want to be hurt again."
He leaned forward and kissed her softly, his hand on her cheek.
" I would never hurt you." he said comfortingly.
She gazed in his beautiful saphire eyes.
" Promise?" she asked hopefully.
He hugged her tightly and whispered in her ear,
" Promise."
She finnaly felt at peace with herself as she tightly embraced him. For once, she didn't feel alone.

> Death

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Sep 22nd 2007

Tags:: fake fear general love pain romance smiles youth
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So yeah it was 1:30 in the morning last nite and i just had an urge to write this down...I'm glad I did I'm quite pleased with it...tell me what u think about it...

Picture from Photobucket...

A few people said to add on to it or put a story around it....it's not really my thing...this just came to me...so neone feel free to add on or something....just make sure to credit me on it too...so if someone's going to, let me kno....

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monicachaloupka Says:

i think that this is good and would love for there to be a story around it

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Richiko Says:

omg that's amazing

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pur plec loud Says:

Ooh, sounds like there could be quite a background to this. You should write it

The two sentences after the first one are fragments. You might consider revising to something like: "She leaned against the wall, eyes cast downward and hugging herself tightly."

"Replyed" should be replied, but I'm sure that's just a typo

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Zoot Zoot Says:

uh. uh. mushy. no.

EmoHeart Says:

That's my current story.
I held off on dating my now-boyfriend for a long time "seriously", because I was so afraid of hurting him, and myself getting hurt. There was many a tear-filled talk, and lotsa comforting hugs and looks like you wrote...
I finally took the risk, and I'm still really happy

True story for you?

Great short piece. You should consider lengthening it/making it a series. This could be #1... just continue little fragments each piece or something.

Keep it up!
-Ashley

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