READ RIGHT TO LEFT. Please tell me what you guys think, I started over my manga agin lol but I'm actually leaving it this way this time since I finally have the story and not just part of it in my head. So yea. I worked really hard on this.. it's read the traditional manga way, right to left. It's the first page to my manga titled "Lynuka". Sorry if anyone is confused, it'll make more sense as it goes, but yes, she's talking to the flame.
The flame you see on this page is very important to my story, it's called the "Flame of Kouin" It's the forbidden magic item of fire. It allows whoever obtains it to gain immortality as long as it remains lit. How does it do that? Basically, it causes time to repeat itself over as soon as the user's natural lifespan is used up for everyone but the user. In other words, life does not continue, it's restarted over and over again when the holder’s life is supposed to be up. This cycle while the flame is lit is called Lynuka.
Every time the cycle restarts, everyone returns to a certain point in time in their lives without knowing, thus in my story, the cause of de ja vu. Meaning every single person is expected, there are no new beings to enter this world while the flame is lit. Hakaisha is informed that three people have set her cycle astray. Which is why she's freaking out on this page. There are three new children born on the exact same day, May 10th that were never here the previous times. Their names are Kyluno, Xeisun, and Sonia. They are called the Ijou.
But that's only a very small part of my manga, there's alot more going on of course but I'd be here all day if I typed it all up.
Lynuka and Hakaisha belong to me
Comments
SheenaXZelos Says:
Very clean, nice use of screen tone ^^ it looks great so far, and by reading the description the storyline sounds really unique and interesting ^^ I hope you continue because I will definitely be following
Hopeful Ennui Says:
ooo nice. I cant wait for the next page
Naxi42 Says:
its looking very good. hurry up and make more. i need manga to read. : )
Shady Says:
It's looking good so far. Keep it up.
muffin ruler Says:
me like
Psychogyarados Says:
A good start. Keep it going. Only... don't give as much info as you did in the description. Wanna keep people guessing and interested in what will happen next. (:
Cilverflame Says:
i like how she looks! she's so pretty~the story sounds very interesting...keep updating!
themusicdied Says:
Very nice job! I like how you've got things layed out. I think that especially where you have the ribbons wrapping around the text box looks very good. It's really eye-catching.
The perspective on the last frame looks very good too. The upward pose really ties in well with the text.
I look forward to seeing you published some day!
BTW, sorry for being a looser friend and not commenting for awhile. My life got eaten by college for awhile.
SailorPoipoi Says:
wow this could fit well among the professionals! Very nice lines and the storyline is promissing
Shunhades Says:
Yay, can't wait for the next page.