This was...interesting to write. Describing the sea in terms that could be interpreted as human was DAMN HARD. Also the punctuation slaughtered me, and I slaughtered it - I thought it all through, had it AOK, then was like "let's give it a wavy rhythm!" and did unspeakable things to it. The punctuation wasn't too good to start with; I like it a bit better now, but punctuation in poetry KILLS ME.
This is a free verse sonnet...the last time I heard a sonnet defined was in
this comedy sketch and only got "fourteen lines, couplet at the end". I was in Italy at the time so I didn't have access to an English dictionary and no one I was with knew what a sonnet is, so I wrote what isn't really a sonnet at all but could pass for one in a (very) bad light.
I suck at structured poems.
Preview image © Caracterdesign of istockphoto.com...obviously. D= I hate it when my preview images have HUGE watermarks, but this was the most appropriate image by a mile
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Comments
Nanook Says:
You've tackled a difficult task here, and while it isn't the best executed piece I've ever seen, it's a grand attempt. I'm no great fan of love poems, not of any kind, mostly due to my lack of experience in them. Sonnets are bloody difficult, too...
HolyCheesecakes Says:
very beautiful! lovely take on love, and they way you pulled the imagery along . . . beautiful job!
Smiling Devil Says:
You're on the frontpage
. This poem is very strong and the imaginary is very bright, I like it very much^^.