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Unnoticed
You see me snap my wrist,
Andd think of nothing of it.
You see the poetry i post,
And think nothing of it.
You see me change the way i dress,
And think nothing of it.
You see my lifeless body,
And think of all the things you saw me do.
You find yourself thinking,
Could I have prevented this?
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Comments
Neji Luver101 Says:
Wow. This is really good.
puppetofdarkness Says:
...Wow. I was excactly like that..well. Probably not excactly. But did the same things...Just waiting for them to notice anything at all.
This is deep. It really moved me.
Odd, huh? ^-^;
angel of death616 Says:
people notice. don't let anything go too far.
Am2000 Says:
life is a sine graph.
vivalavolcom321 Says:
this is really great
congrats on front page too
i think i saw 2 of your poems up there today
f3a57ing Says:
"Snap" your wrist? ...Like... break it?
xXAliiPineappleXx Says:
Lovely. </3
Gartenian Princess Says:
You know, I often wonder iif people realize how much the changes they see are affected by our minds and are, therefor, deathly important.
Winged Sence Says:
Not very good with emotion or dilivery. Choppy grammer at best. Not very enlightening. It's not even very clever, straight forward to the point and somewhat boring.
The subject in question is somewhat cliche which wouldn't be so bad if you had executed it more creatively.
Try using different schemes rather than A-B-A-B-B-A. There's more to poetry than rhyming.
All in all, work on it. This isn't very good.
Penises.