Setting

by AlexKun

in Works in Progress

Setting

Far, far away, perhaps in another world, another galaxy, or another dimension, or a place that only exists in our dreams, there existed a magnificent city. On top of a harshly scorched red earth, with a delicate red backdrop that was the sky, rose up towering buildings, reaching nearly all the way into the sky. Stained as red as the earth, after many a year of sandstorms and sweltering heat, they stood tall, wide and firm. The people, all dressed in loose garb, and large hats, went about their busy days in the streets and in their homes. The streets merely flattened red earth and the occasional assured planks, with vendors and shops and all along the sides their owners heckling and advertising. All this occurs in the mere hours of the morning, once noon draws near; the people of the streets vanish into their homes to escape the massive heat that would soon be upon them. But at roughly two in the afternoon each day, the sun begins to set behind a massive structure to the south, a tall, widely spread out palace looming over the land, and casting a lofty shadow down upon the metropolis, relieving the people of the horrendous heat, and allowing them to escape once more to the outside world. And atop the palace, sit a narrow tower, which would first shade the main roads, allowing vender's to reset their shops before the masses returned to the scene.

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May 29th 2007
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Setting to a short story/novel I've been brainstorming. It's short, so read the damn thing. Descriptive? Not descriptive enough? Are you thinking realism/cartoon-ism/anime-ism? Feedback, feedback, feedback.

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Nukude Says:

Neat :3 I believe it's descriptive enough, and gives a sci-fi feel... cuz the setting makes me think Mars along with a little fantasy(might just be because of the palace)... but thats just me

colla Says:

i wish i could write stories :'

Sense Says:

It sounds interesting Not to mention, it seems well written to me xD At first I could picture the story background to be sci-fi , as Nuku has mentioned. :3 (somewhat like Star Wars or something but not exactly alike x3 It just fits that mood for some reason ) It's descriptive enough too. :3 I dont know for other readers but I find descriptive narrations best written this way, rather than to make the section too elaborate and overkill the idea you were trying to relay xD But that is just me since I am one of the few people who like to chase the story and read fast out of excitement xD ahahah. and ah, in my opinion, I imagine the story setting to be more of realism (or even Cinematic, I should say! )

It looks promising and hope that was a helpful feedback hehe