I suppose angst is the closest word for it <_< why is there no 'emotional' or 'melancholy' option?
Feel free to comment as long as you're sensitive, this is fairly personal, I wrote this last July when I was sad and angry and things, and it turns out to be one of my favourite poems.
Note: FRAK I HATE LACK OF BEING ABLE TO USE 'SPACES'
7:05
Edit: wow, I got a feature, that's just...wow, thank you.
Comments
2401PenitentTangent Says:
Very reminiscent of Poe. I like it.
skinnyvee Says:
The same reason we have "suicidial" as a mood option for journals. Really, the hell?
I can see why this is one of your favorite poems. There's an incredible use of imagery here, and the feeling of the poem has a nice, gradual progression from light and warm to cold and miserable. The repetition draws a sort of chaotic emphasis to certain elements of the poem. Very nice.
I noticed a couple of typos while I was cruisin' through this:
Some dislike the taste an fly away (third stanza)
My hand sting (fifth stanza)
kazehana56 Says:
How lovely. I'm not sure if it was intended or not to be lyrical, but in my head as I read it, it comes out as a soft, sad melody. Honestly(and I claim to be no real expert on the topic), I think if you can pull off a mood for a poem before the first line is ever recited, then you are doing what you intend and accomplishing a true work of art. I have to agree with Tangent, this is very reminescent of Poe's "The Bells," but in a very good way. I'd love to look at your original piece and see this in the "flying away" format you mentioned.
But yes, brilliantly done. I wish we could see more poets and writers on SA with this kind of caliber. ^^
skinnyvee Says:
Somebooody's feaaatured.
Parva lupa Says:
Goodness how come you've got not many faves on this one... it's so perfect, so full of emotion, and the repetition of the words only add more movement and feelings to it. You brought me speechless which doesn't happen easily. Can sense both sadness and anger in this, a feeling I recognise very well but myself have never been able to express it in any beautiful way like this. Wonderful!
Izar Says:
That is very interesting...
It reminds me of a certain type of abstract stories I like to read.
And yeah... Sheezy categories often suck.
But when You wrote that You wanted to categorise it as "melancholy" it gave me an idea on how it should be read.
Parva lupa Says:
Hmm for some reason sheezy won't open this one in my browser, just as I wanted to read it again :/ any idea how this can be, or can you copy/paste the poem in pm to me or so? please?