Sharon gets stroppier every time you come back to this, I think.
I like. I do want to hear more about the infrastructure of Heaven though, so that it makes more sense for Sharon to rebel against it.
There are some minor grammatical errors: e.g. "Sharone would have waved the four horsemen of the Apocalypse and told them to stop interrupting by now," doesn't make a lot of sense, imo. Otherwise it looks fine to me. Continue!
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YenaMara Says:
makes me smile
please keep on writing
Island Gorilla Says:
I like. I do want to hear more about the infrastructure of Heaven though, so that it makes more sense for Sharon to rebel against it.
There are some minor grammatical errors: e.g. "Sharone would have waved the four horsemen of the Apocalypse and told them to stop interrupting by now," doesn't make a lot of sense, imo. Otherwise it looks fine to me. Continue!