In a Wanderer's Eyes

by Nanook

in Completed Works

In a Wanderer's Eyes

I woke up this morning on the upside of the moon
A most dark and desolate place.
I closed my eyes and the moon disappeared
Leaving me on the edges of space.

I wandered rather listlessly
Across my silent mind
And found joy in remembering
The world I'd left behind.

With its chaos and violence and worries
With its lying and fighting and doubt
And out here, right beside the stars
You forget what we're all about.

The scum of the universe, the lowest of the low
There's nothing that's good I can say
So I nestled my head in the stardust
On an off-branch of the Milky Way.

And as I looked down on a struggling world
I thought (and I know this is true)
That even with all of our deviant ways
Our planet is still sparkling blue.

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Apr 29th 2007
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I've always been something of a nerd. Nerdy in the sense that I can't do sports, nerdy in my obsession with correct grammar usage, nerdy in my love of animation, but also nerdy in my obsession with space.

This love of the unknown is fed by endless sci-fi novels and science documentaries, but I can't really ever satisfy it, unless I were actually to go to space. And trust me, if they ever need to put a writer in the shuttle, I'll buy the ticket to Cape Canaveral myself.

This is a poem-doodle, based in the point of view of a cosmic wanderer, looking down on the Earth. Take away from it what you will.

EDIT: Frontpage.
For once, I think I may be deserving.

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Smiling Devil Says:

It's very good^^, I like it very much

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Donut Says:

Wow. I love this. It better get front page. :c

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WildBlueSun Says:

Love.

Lots of.

Has stimmung.

Wins favourite.

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AMBCGP Says:

This is very good, I like it.

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Fitos Says:

The fourth stanza seems to be a bit off beat. Namely, the second line is just odd to me. I cannot quite make it out. Though it might be because it is almost two at night now And what do you mean "our planet is still sparkling blue"? (Btw. Nice alliteration you have there with the "s".) And isn't "lowest of the low" a rather often used concept?

The rythm here is so that it sounds almost like a children's story... is that intentional? If so, then GOOD WORK!

But I truly cannot say that this is the best you have made.

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