Well, first things first, you gotta work on placement of the text bubbles. It's very difficult to understand the comic, because they're out of whack. You need to make it obvious as to what is said first, or else people will reas it wrong and all that will come out of reading this is garble. Bubbles that should be read first are usually placed higher than the others and as far left as they can go. For Example: http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1115496/
While the character is on the right, you can you're supposed to read what he said first. It's just natural for humans to read comic strips like this.
On that note, you also want to have an understandable plot. It may be the first page, but you're trying to put too much information into it. The Rouge and Eggman conversation would have been enough to be one comic on it's own, which could have also helped with any spacing issues you might have had with the text bubbles.
As for the original characters, this is the first page, we know nothing about them or who this Sanjaya is, who these OTHER characters are and why they want this forest, yada yada. It's cluttered, and could definatly be spaced out over at least a few comics.
The typical mistake for someone who is making a comic for the first time is that they try to rush into what they feel is the "good part" of the plot without covering minor details like these. However, spending a few introductory comics to at least introduce readers to the world these characters reside in or at least WHO THEY ARE will help imensly.
Don't understand me, I'm not trying to rip on you. But after years of making comics, I know what needs to be done and how you can improve. I hope you stick with it, and become better.
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REDDOG7 Says:
Very nice!
JD Says:
Oh...boy...this needs a lot of work.
Well, first things first, you gotta work on placement of the text bubbles. It's very difficult to understand the comic, because they're out of whack. You need to make it obvious as to what is said first, or else people will reas it wrong and all that will come out of reading this is garble. Bubbles that should be read first are usually placed higher than the others and as far left as they can go. For Example: http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1115496/
While the character is on the right, you can you're supposed to read what he said first. It's just natural for humans to read comic strips like this.
On that note, you also want to have an understandable plot. It may be the first page, but you're trying to put too much information into it. The Rouge and Eggman conversation would have been enough to be one comic on it's own, which could have also helped with any spacing issues you might have had with the text bubbles.
As for the original characters, this is the first page, we know nothing about them or who this Sanjaya is, who these OTHER characters are and why they want this forest, yada yada. It's cluttered, and could definatly be spaced out over at least a few comics.
The typical mistake for someone who is making a comic for the first time is that they try to rush into what they feel is the "good part" of the plot without covering minor details like these. However, spending a few introductory comics to at least introduce readers to the world these characters reside in or at least WHO THEY ARE will help imensly.
Don't understand me, I'm not trying to rip on you. But after years of making comics, I know what needs to be done and how you can improve. I hope you stick with it, and become better.
Kiddiman Says:
NICE!!!!
Kiddiman Says:
can i use you'Re sprite in a animation?????????
gothtk14 Says:
I'll join if someone can help me draw gothtk the hedgehog like a sprite.
XxGreenxX Says:
very cool