The Apple Tree

by kazehana56

in Completed Works

< 'Auris and Lokei' by kazehana56

The Apple Tree

They planted the seed in the front yard,
So the sun from the East would be bright.
And they watered the place, and he kissed her young face,
As the morning was breaking the sky.

"When the apple tree blossoms,"
Her father had said. "We'll be together when the apple tree blooms."
And he hugged his sweet wife, who prayed for his life,
And then he left on a bus for the war.

The seasons came and the seasons went.
The apple tree budded and bloomed.
And for years she did wait, as she pondered his fate.
But her father, he never returned.

Her mother died from lonely years waiting
The girl married and had buds of her own
But she stayed in that home where the apple tree'd grown
And she watched as her children would bloom.

Then on one spring morn, when the wind it was warm.
And she lay in her bed facing East,
Her children gathered round, faces painted with frowns.
As an old woman slipped off with her sleep.

As the children left home, they cried out their woe
For the loss of their mother, so dear.
But the youngest, she smiled as she walked for a while
And she stopped and stood next to the tree.

"Mother asked to be buried here when she past,"
She told her siblings, who all would agree.
"She just had to wait, for just the right date.
And look, she's left as the apple tree bloomed"
> 'Lokei' by kazehana56

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Mar 21st 2007
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apple limerick poetry spiritual tree
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This was really a gift for my mom. I know it sounds like a limerick...but oh well. Limerick's don't always have to be vulgar.

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Featured by Tiomara
Mar 19th 2007
My god, this bit is so beautiful! Not all poetry has to be dark and depressing, this one actually made me smile, and such symbolism with the apple tree...It wasn't one that made me sad but happy, though the plot of what happens in itself is very sad.

Kudos to the author big time.

Comments

Doodlibop Says:

I must say, it is very beautiful. I enjoyed reading it. ^-^

CaptainLysi Says:

You know, rhyming in my opinion is really hard to pull off without sounding cheap and corny but you definitely did it well. I loved it.

Fitos Says:

As a fellow poet, I can truly say that this is one of the best poems ever written in Sheezyart and definatly deserved the feature.

The only thing I would change is the fact that you sometimes rhymed the a word with the same word. And perhaps you should put this:
and he kissed her young face," one line down. In other words make it such:

"They planted the seed in the front yard,
So the sun from the East would be bright.
And they watered the place,
And he kissed her young face,
As the morning was breaking the sky."

But other than that... a perfect poem with lots of emotion and technique.

Redsun Says:

Thats awesome buddy. I want to cry yet I don't need to because its so happy as well. Awesome job and congrats as well! ~~

Faosyrith Says:

Lovely. I admire poetry on the brighter outlook of things.

cellieruru Says:

Eh...eh...*pawing helplessly*...that was really beautiful. I love it.

Children of the Grave Says:

So sad, yet not depressing. A touching story told within the lines of a wonderful peice of poetry. Very much deserving of Featured Artwork.