House of evil chapter1

by gorillaz

in Completed Works

House of evil chapter1

Chapter: one The house of evil

This story starts out with five people walking in the woods there names are Chirs, John, Sarah, Mike, and Diego. They were having a party and they wanted it to be secluded so they went deeper into the woods. It started to get dark and everyone was getting worry and they felt lost. Sarah: do u know where we are. John: no sorry but look there's a mansion maybe the owners of it know where we are and can help us. At that moment in the dark there was these dogs that came out but yet they didn't look like dogs they looked decomposed there faces gone there ribs showing. most of there skin eaten away by maggots and flies as they still stood there wriggling inside. They growled deeply as they circled them. Chris: everyone into the house quickly. everyone ran to the house as quickly as they could. John was too slow the dogs got him it was too late they then began to shred and rip him apart eating his insides. Everyone screamed in terror as they watched there friend John get eaten by the creatures and have no ability to do anything about it. They locked the door when they got into the house. Diego: what the fuck was those things that ate John. Chris: I don't know but it looks like were trapped in here. Mike: is everyone ok. yeah were all fine. Sarah: Maybe we should look for the owner of this house and get an idea on what the hell is going on in here.

End chapter: one
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Mature Feb 3rd 2007
Tags:
alone dark and horror dont go house human nature in mystery narrative
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My first submission holy crap its been too long. yeah sorry this took alot longer to bring up then i thought it would. like i said before this is a horror and people who dont like blood and gore dont read this. all i have to say now is enjoy and welcome to the house of evil. oh and trust me it will get darker as you get farther.

Comments

Shadow Dinosaur Says:

Poor John. :(

Good start.

evolution Says:

how does it end??

write chapter two ,asap.I must know how it ends.
cool story.

Dawn Says:

*Twitch-Must-Make-Fiction-Twitch*
nice.
Oi, make it into paragraphs so it wold be easier for meh to read. (I have glasses nowlol)

Nerdysimmer Says:

good start on the story, dude.

Smiling Devil Says:

I like this story! It has the nessecary ingredients to become a good horror story. You only have to pay attention to the important details, like punctuation and proper utility of the word: "you". The writing is wonderfull apart from those points.^^