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The Wayward Warrior
Not forty years but centuries forty-fold
Have I heard the howling of the wilderness wind:
Three times tried and
Three times treacherous--
No Messiah nor even mortal Moses--
For the foothold of the fallen reaches fathoms,
Contaminated chasms of the conscience.
Barren land exposes
Barren spirit
No safety for the seed
No root, no resistance
From the wind but a whisper
Will whisk this chaff away
Would that I were that rock
Struck by the staff of salvation
Then from stone would spring a living water
And the dead mockery that beats within me
Would shift from demon to child once more
And these eyes that glimpse not the banks of Jordan
Find rest in darkness that illumines
From within--only then then without
Show the scribe surrender
Show the speaker silence
Fight for the fighter
Who can fight no more
Fire of redemption
Fill me that I may face Thee fearless forevermore
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Comments
LightDrop Says:
Though I don't understand all fully, I find it impressive!
c u
Tranquil Waters Says:
Wow your really good at this
I'm not sure if I understand everything, but as LightDrop says.. it IS impressive 
I don't regret watching you
Galloglasses Says:
Is this a reflection of conflicting inner conscience, your own aggresive tendancies or anger perhaps? Personally I don't know wether not this is a reflection of you or your opinion on Warriors in general.
CafeCliche Says:
I really love the regal and almost old-fashioned tone you use here, it works really well with your diction. And though I say old-fashioned, the message is as real now as it would have been years ago. Impressive, solid work!
Nanook Says:
Excellent work, as usual.
Might I assume that it's about spirituality?
Pash Says:
You capture the expression very well. It feels like a photograph, the way you morph and switch words in a Shakespearian sort of way. It's solid, and deep, and extremely well-written. Beautiful!
GoLdMaGeAcE Says:
You make the saying 'actions speak louder than words' seem like a joke. This one is good, but because I can't really SAY anything to match my admiration, I'll just favorite it and be on my way ^^ excellent work.
Virangelus Says:
Beautiful indeed. It's very rare that I like a poem when it doesn't rhyme :) So you've done an excellent job. I kinda know how that feels too, the poem that is.
Fitos Says:
Ah... beautiful poetry. Totally different from mine, but still to my liking.
I like the fact that you don't use almost any of the words as they would be used in common speech.
I can definately say that you know alot more about poetry than I do and that you MUST have read countles of poems in your life-time.
I would be honored if you would comment on my poetry so that I could get comments form a professional.
Thank you.
psycospaz Says:
very beautiful!! your flow is amazing and smooth, and your words twinged my heart strings. You will find your answers, remember patience is a virtue!