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karne's legacy 3: duel
...as Nico charged, he drew his two bone blades that were his namesake, Darkness and Volt.
Karne soon found himself dodging a feint from Darkness, no later then parrying a thrust from Volt.
"So, you can do a little with that hammer, let's see how you can strike with it" cocked Nico.
"With pleasure" growled Karne.
Karne let loose a flurry of blows, but Nico parried and dodged each one as if he could slow time.
"Who the hell was the idiot that accepted you into our faction?" mocked Nico "If I was him, I would have serious second thoughts"
"SHUTUP!" cried Karne as he unleashed a second charge.
Nico simply swept up his legs with Volt.
"If I were you, I would Shut up and think. You fight with just your rage, no passion, no mind, your simply an angry child" calmly murmured Nico.
Karne got angrier, because he knew every word was right, and he would never amount to anything fighting on like this.
But he wasn't going to just give up.
He jumped to his feet heroically, and with what little energy he had left, he swung the hammer at Nico.
Nico sliced through the hammer's head as if it were a katana to butter.
"Come, you have much to learn, and so little time to learn it."
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Comments
You might want to sort out a few grammar mistakes and, though I can see you have a hard time writing, make your chapters longer. Seriously, nobody wants to read 15 sentences worth of a story. If I were you I'd go and work really hard trying to get an actual "Chapter" out. Short and simple doesn't really do much when it's a story.
PrincessAurora Says:
Forget what Kenny said about the length of your writing. Writing is writing, and you, the author, can decide how long you want a chapter to be. I enjoyed reading this. It's nice to see more serious productions from you. I look forward to reading more. :) Plus one for you.
inferno Says:
^^ interesting :) i like the writing, it's easy to follow what's going on ^^
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it is a bit short, yes, but i can't say the story parts i wrote are all that long either XP
(write more, i wanna read on!